英语四级作文,帮我看看哪里错的和要改进的呗（我英语不咋地）,嘻嘻……
WhatElectivestoChoose
Thecollegeisthemostimportantstationinourlife!Inthecollege,weneedtouseallkindsofknowledgetoenrichus!So,choosesomesuitableelectivesforusisanimpantantwaytogetknowledge!
Facetoallkindsofelectives,everyonehavetheirownthinkingandchoice.Somepeoplelikedrawing,theychooseart.Somepeoplelikesports,theychoosePE.Evensomepeopleelsechoosealessonjustthattheywanttorelax!
Inmyopinion,whatelectivestochoosedependonourhabitandwhatyouwanttoknowmore!Wehavetoknowthatwecanimproveusontheonehandbyhabits!Asfarasiamconcerned,ilikecomputersoichoosecomputerscienceandiamreallystudyitwell.
Allinall,wehavepatattentiontowhatkindofelectivestochoose,inordertomakeusbetter!
李允旺回答：
choosesomesuitableelectivesforusisanimpantantwaytogetknowledge!
头重脚轻了,应该改成It'sanimportantwaytochoosesomesuitableelectivesforustogetknowledge!
Faceto改成facing.
thinking改成thought.
justthattheywanttorelax!把that改成for或者as.
wehavepat改成wehavetopay
makeusbetter改成us后面加一个动词,可以是become等等.
敝人能力有限,希望能帮到你一些.
裴晓芳回答：
帮助很多了！！不过我想知道thinking改为thought是语法的哪个方面，好补一补，谢谢啦
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