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RecreationalActivities
Nowadays,differentkindsofrecreationalactivitiesaroundourlife.Forexample,watchingTV,singing,dancing,playingchess,traveling,surfingontheInternetandsoon.
Therearemanyrecreationalactivitiesinourlifeanditcanmakeussohappy.Peoplewhoalwaysinworkcantakepartinrecreationalactivitiestorelaxtheirselfandpeoplewhostayathomeallalongcantakepartinittoenrichtheirlife.Buteverycoinhastwosides,recreationalactivitiesisnoexceptionandinanotherword,itstillhasnegativeaspects.Tobeginwith,thestudentswhotakepartinmanyrecreationalactivitiesmayeffecttheirstudy.Andinaddition,manypeoplecan'tlimitthetimesinplayanditwillreducethetimesofrest.
Formypart,weshouldn'twork、studyorstayathomealltheway,wemusttakepartinrecreationalactivitiestomakeourbodyrelax,forexample,wecaninviteourfriendstotravelonweekend,Ithinkitisveryinteresting.Buteverythingshouldn'tdoexcessively,wemuststudytolimittheplaytimes.Inaword,weshouldadmittheadvantagesofrecreationalactivitiesandalsoacceptthedisadvantages.
黄钲东回答:
我就不分析内容,帮你看看语法错误吧.第一句differentkindsofrecreationalactivitiesaroundourlife没有动词啊.汗.印象分倍减.Therearemanyrecreationalactivitiesinourlifeanditcanmakeussohap...