TOEFL作文求批改.450字,不知道是否过多.以前有人说我写得太刻意复杂,这次用词用句尽量简单了.希望有经验的同学都帮帮忙哈~Doyouagreeordisagreewiththefollowingstatement?Sportsteachespeoplelessonsab

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　　Manypeople,believingthatsportscanonly(providepeople)providepeoplewithgoodhealthandrelaxation,maintainthattheycannotteachpeopleanything.However,Iaminfavorofthestatementthatathleticactivitiesteachusalotinvariousaspects.

　　Forinstance,sportshelpuslearnaboutunity.Todemonstrateitwecantakethefootballgameasanexample.Thesuccessofafootballteamdependsonhowwellteammatesperformthestrategyandhowharmoniousthecooperation(between)amongthemembersis.Ifonetotallyplaysaloneandnevergivesanotherpersonasinglechancetoperforminfootballmatch,heorshewilldefinitelygetexhaustedandfailtowin,ruiningtheunityoftheteam.Thus,wecanseefromthisscenariothatonlybycollaborationwilltheteammatesholdthesamegoalandthenworkwelltopursuetheirdream.

　　Moreover,persistence,anothersignificantelementwhichdetermineswinorloss,isusuallywhatpeoplegainbydoingsports.Forexample,marathonisknownasoneofthemostpopularextremeracesthatchallengehumanlimitation

　　bothphysicallyandmentally.Without(persevering)persisting,onemustfailhalfofthewayandreceivenothingbutregret.I(have)hadonce(beenpracticing)practisedlong-distancerunningthreeyearsagoformyHighSchoolEntranceExaminations.IcouldstillrecallthetimewhenIranthreethousandmileseverydayafterschool,justfortrainingmyphysicalability.(Nomatter)Nomatterwhetheritwasindownpouror(sunschorch)underthescorchingsun,(freezeorhigh)oratafreezingorhightemperature,neverdidIgiveuprunning.Afterallofthetorture,Igotfullscoresinthesportsexaminationsandastrongspiritthatwouldnotbeeasilydefeatedby(setback)setbacks.Ifwecaninsistoneverytask(happens)happeninginourlife,wewillsurelysucceedatlast.

　　Additionally,sportsteachusnottocareexcessivelyabouttheresult.(Tosayanotherword)Inotherwords,theprogressinwhichwedevelopourselves

　　andobtainfriendshipismorevaluablethanagoldmedal.ItwasinlastsummerwhenI(go)tooktennistrainingwithmybestfriendYoyo.Atthebeginningwe(wenttotennismatches)tookpartinmixeddoublesmatchesas(double)partnersandenjoyedlyingonthetenniscourttogetheraftertraining.Nevertheless,gettingimprovedfarmorequicklythanshedid,IwasnotsatisfiedwithjustplayingindoubleanymoresoIaskedmycoach(toattendmatchandtotrainseparately)forseparatetrainingforsinglematches.Tomysurprise,hesaid〃You'velost(what)therealpleasureofsport〃.ItsuddenlydawnedonmethatIhadpaidtoomuchattentiontowinbutignoredmypleasureandfriendship.

　　Thereisdefinitelynolackoflearningopportunitywhenwearedoingsports,butitisuswhosometimeslacktheawarenesstograbit.Sportscanteachusmorethanweimagineifwekeepinmindtostudyatanytime.